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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languages can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Residing in a non-native place where one has to communicate in unfamiliar languages can be challenging for one's social and daily life. In my opinion,
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 is definitely true especially in the case of elderly
people
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 who may find it difficult to learn & adapt to the new
language
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 completely. To start with, some foreign languages can be really difficult to speak and understand and it may take years for an individual to get him comfortable with. During
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 time, the person may find it challenging to socialize in the way he used to at his native place which may discourage him altogether to meet
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 often.
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, his social life gets hampered and he may end up being lonely or in depression.
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, a lack of knowledge in a
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that is
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 native to a country can cause one trouble in comprehending the intentions, choices, thoughts and overall personality of local
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 correctly which may bring a feeling of disconnect in them for
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people
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,
people
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 may resort to not mingle with the locals and choose to avoid them at their disposal.
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,
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 at their workplace are often seen to hang out in different groups with locals and other
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 which creates an unhealthy space for human growth and development.
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, many
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 who are unable to communicate effectively in the local
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 can face problems in doing their basic chores and following their daily routine like reaching a specific place or say ordering some food.
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 can prove to be frustrating and time-wasting for the individual which may lower his desire to reside in the foreign country. In conclusion, I think it is extremely important to learn and effectively communicate in the local
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 of the country a person is residing in so as to have a smooth personal and social life.
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