In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much passport. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
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health
issues due to the over eating
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apply
food
I agree up to a certain extent with this
statement because health
is important for the development of the citizens
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with
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ready-made
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mostly in some Nations individuals are prefer to have instant food
you to working masses have do not time to make food
at home individual prefer to go restaurant and like to eat this
type of food
you to test masses forget its negative impact on the body some serious health
issues like abhishti
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food
. Government
to improve higher tax on these kind
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this kind
these kinds
food
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite