In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much passport. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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the individuals are facing
health
issues due to the
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high taxes effect on the street vendor employment.
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an over growing number of individuals are suffering due to consumption of
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food
mostly in some Nations individuals are prefer to have instant
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at home individual prefer to go restaurant and like to eat
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issues like
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gastric heart attacks problems it is important for every individual to the development of the nation to avoid to eat fast
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of
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in demand if demand will decrease individual will prefer to cook
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