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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much passport. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

In few
nations
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 most
of
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apply
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the individuals are facing
health
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 issues due to the
over eating
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overeating
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of
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apply
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the instant
food
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 I agree up to a certain extent with
this
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 statement because
health
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 is important for the development of the
citizens
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citizen's
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 high taxes effect on the street vendor employment.
To begin
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with
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 an over growing number of individuals are suffering due to consumption of
ready made
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food
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 mostly in some Nations individuals are prefer to have instant
food
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 you to working masses have do not time to make
food
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 at home individual prefer to go restaurant and like to eat
this
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 type of
food
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 you to test masses forget its negative impact on the body some serious
health
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 issues like
abhishti
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Chishti
 gastric heart attacks problems it is important for every individual to the development of the nation to avoid to eat fast
food
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.
Government
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 to improve higher tax on
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
food
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 it affects on the Fast
Food
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 Industry and it will be
decrease
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a decrease
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 in demand if demand will decrease individual will prefer to cook
proper
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a proper
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 meal at home. It is actively good for
this
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 helpful stop on the opposite side hire tax is not for every individual few masses are effect on their income of source like Street vendors are unemployed due to the higher tax
government
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 receive already text from
this
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 type of small businesses for poor people
government
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 should take proper decisions in the future for their future to conclude our life is based on
health
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 is wealth is good every individual
are
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is
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 happy
government
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 increasing the text and fast
food
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 will low-income groups from buying them.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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