Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed by some
people
that companies should increase the cost
of products
with high levels of sugar
to mitigate associated health
issues. I completely disagree with this
proposal since it is impossible to make every sugary product more expensive and crimes could be encouraged.
To commence with, it should be remembered that sugar
exists in almost all kinds of food
and drink
, even in natural ones like fruits and nuts. If this
suggestion is accepted and food
providers increase the prices of their products
, every single product may have to have its cost
rise
, as they contain either natural or artificial sweeteners. This
may not bring about the desired effect as people
might consider the rise
in the cost
of sweet products
as financially related and not for bettering their health
. Hence
, they might continue to consume the insidious sweet products
as they usually do. For instance
, if there is a sudden rise
in the cost
of food
and beverages which is rich in sugar
, people
will likely think the cost
of raw sugar
has surged and will keep purchasing the food
or drink
.
Another reason for not making sugary products
more expensive is that it encourages crimes such
as robberies and shoplifting. This
is primarily because even though being detrimental to people
’s health
, sugar
still plays a vital role in ensuring the human body functions properly and preventing us from certain ailments. In other words
, human needs it to survive and live healthily. Food
and drink
with higher costs may not be affordable for those with low income and they may end up robbing it to maintain their health
. For example
, when fruits were made pricier in Vietnam, many poor people
robbed them from the local market since they could not afford them.
In conclusion, making sugary food
and drink
costs more may not lead to the wanted
result since Verb problem
desired
people
might keep buying the products
and there may be a rise
in the crime rate.Submitted by tranbaongoc231007 on
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