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Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a positive development?

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people
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 the dressing and lifestyle of their favourite celebrities. They do
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 because they are their idols and they prefer to look like them. I consider
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 as a positive development because famous
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 have a few good habits while copying them
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 these.
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,
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copy
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 their favourite famous
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 because they want to look like them.
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 brings them a sense of happiness. If you like someone, you love to be like them.
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 like their style and dressing sense. They like to wear
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 attire worn by them. They believe that they will become like them if they
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, a recent survey conducted stated that
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 students wear
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 of designer clothes worn by famous pop stars.
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 makes them feel that they are
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 important like famous
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, in
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 to be like famous
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 they
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 them.
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,
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same
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 good habits followed by famous
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. To maintain their bodies they do
excercises
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exercises
exercise
 and eat healthy diets. They perform and learn various arts. They dance and put
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 efforts to improve
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. Common
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also
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 these skills. They follow the same diet and
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exercise
 routines followed by their famous
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.
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, a recent article in a newspaper stated that
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 are becoming healthier because they are following lifestyles of celebrities.
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, copying famous
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 is a positive trend as
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 helps
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 to inculcate good habits. In conclusion,
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the trend
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 of copying famous
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 rapidly burgeoning owing to
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choice
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 to look like them. In my
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 is a positive development because
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 is helping them to instilled with
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a better
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 lifestyle.
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