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Many working people get little or no exercise during the work day, and have health problems as a result. -Why do so many people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? -Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many professionals find it hard to get
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 for their workout on weekdays. The main reason behind
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 is not having
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-management and an unplanned
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 and
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, in order to resolve it, one should outline the plan for the whole
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 and
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, it can improve their physically and mentally. People working extra hours and focusing only on professional life keep them away from the GYM or exercise. An unorganized work or unplanned
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 ruins the whole
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 and sometimes people’s life by keeping them mentally disturbed.
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, according to a recent survey, 60% of successful CEOs in the Middle East could not give proper
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 to their families and themselves for a workout or other social activities. There are many solutions, but planning a
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 and
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 is the best. In
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 modern, era people are attached to the smartphone and applications like Google planner is popular, which reminds and assists them to complete tasks on
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 and organize the whole
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 well.
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, Mr Akshay Kumar, an actor from Bollywood, goes for jogging and yoga in the morning at 4.00 am every
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 and afterwards to the early to the work. He is setting an example for the
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 generation. Even at the age of 55, he looks young and energetic and doing more films than younger actors. To conclude, individuals without proper goals and planning struggle a lot in finding
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 for exercise on working days, but apps like Google planner and mindset can help them to manage it well, which can result in good health.
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