Recently there has been a noticeable rise in population. It is thought that genetically modified
crops
should be increased. In
this
essay
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I shall explain the possible positive and negative impacts of
such
an idea.
On the
one
hand, the production of more genetically modified
foods
results in many advantages.
One
of which is increasing the rate of agriculture outcome.
this
is because genetic engineering aims to come up with
crops
which are more productive and with a longer life span.
Accordingly
, main cereals like wheat, corn and rice are expected to fill the needs of the nowadays elevated population.
Additionally
, vegetables that used to rotten in a few hours or days are now modified to
last
for
one
to two weeks, so they can bare being shipped to far places without being damaged.
For instance
, original tomatoes used to rotten from two to four days maximum, but they were treated to sunrise for over two weeks recently.
Such
development , indeed , affects positively the country’s economy.
On the other hand
, using genetically modified
foods
may have some drawbacks.
One
disadvantage is that it causes dangerous diseases. To illustrate, as scientists change the characters of natural vegetables and fruits, they, definitely, use a chemical substance which eventually affects our health causing dreadful sicknesses
such
as cancer.
For example
, according to research conducted by the Faculty of Agriculture at Zagazig University in which 5000 volunteers who consume GM
foods
participated in the research, about 10% of the participants developed different cancerous diseases. Another disadvantage is that
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the industry of producing organic natural
crops
would recede. Due to the almost impossible competition between them and the productions with cheap prices compared with organic
crops
.
Consequently
, investors who own farmlands that plant organic
foods
may lose their jobs affecting the country economy negatively.
To conclude, more GM
foods
result in many advantages as increasing food production and quality, while they may have many disadvantages as affecting our health and vanishing the organic food industry.
