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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
When people decided
on
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to live in a
country
, they
it
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can happen practical
problems
except
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 social
problems
 if they do not learn
language
 talked in the
country
. I partly agree with
this
 statement because I believe that social
problems
 are essential
such
 as making a friend, being ripped off, and miscommunication in school or job whereas lack of
language
 is negligible in practical issues, eating in a restaurant or home, going to a location. On the one hand, a lot of social
problems
 can meet in daily
life
. The most important one is miscommunication in a job. Material income is needed when it is started to live in another
country
.
Secondly
, it is chatting with people in an activity that people talk to someone to relax psychologically.
Therefore
, they need a foreign
language
 in their social
life
. Another problem is to be ripped off. Take a person living financial
problems
 as an example; when the consumer shop in a place, the seller can cheat her about some situations
such
 as change, the original price of the product.
On the other hand
, as technology develops, the
life
 of a stranger has become easier.
That is
 to say, thanks to applications
such
 as many translations, most
problems
 can solve in practical
life
. In most restaurants, menus consist of several languages or even if they do not write, information about the food can be obtained by using translation or in case someone does not answer when how to travel to somewhere is asked, we can write in the map the name of the location and it brings us directions. By way of conclusion, we do not need knowing
an
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language
 of the
country
 where we live in practical subjects
as a result
 of advances in technology
however
 we have to learn the
language
 in social issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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