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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 competitive society, highly paid jobs are the primary determiners for many youngsters in selecting their career. I strongly agree with the above statement as money is the key element for survival, a better lifestyle and consistency. To commence with, there are many reasons why prioritizing huge income is crucial when choosing any job are as follows.
Firstly
, in order to live a luxurious life by spending on premium products
such
 as a car, house and so on, it is mandatory to have a heavy income.
Secondly
, to provide a good education to our children in an international school, which provide more value to them,
also
 help them to enhance their skills.
For instance
, the private school fee is much higher in comparison to government-run education centres.
Furthermore
, earning more at an early age will create a strong foundation for secure and sound financial stability, which will support us during our old age.
Also
, after voluntary retirement, if one is willing to go on a world tour to explore, monetary aspects will not be a constraint; if it was wisely planned during his younghood.
Lastly
, in a situation where a person who has completed his graduation with the help of an education loan, will need to be taking up a job that pays more, eventually, it aids in repaying the loan faster and will be able to start up a new debt-free life. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that deciding on a career, based on the highest salary in the market will definitely have a positive impact on an individual’s life not only with the present situation but
also
 in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • job satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • passion
  • quality of life
  • work-life balance
  • career advancement
  • societal impact
  • income disparity
  • material success
  • monetary compensation
  • wealth accumulation
  • economic well-being
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