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Radio will no longer be able to hold its presence, as television and internet media will replace it very soon. Do you agree or disagree?

Contemporary technologies have brought inevitable changes in the way of acquiring
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.
Due to
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this
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 development, it has been observed that
radio
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 is being replaced by Television and the
Internet
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 at a very fast pace and
soon
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is soon
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 going to
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be completely
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sideline
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it
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apply
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. I agree with
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 notion
and
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, and
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reasons
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the reasons
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 to strengthen my viewpoint are put forth in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, a few people opine that
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radio
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the radio
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 is still used by some senior citizens as they have a habit of listening to it. Since they are not comfortable with using the
internet
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 and television, they remain
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 to the
radio
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instead
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 of new technologies.
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, I believe the number of these people is decreasing day by day, owing to which,
time
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the time
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 is not far away when
radio
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 will be rarely seen.
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, in 2019, the sales
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 of
radio
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 in the US, as compared to the previous decade,
is
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declined by 80%.
This
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 trend clearly depicts the inescapable truth of the
disappearing
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 of
radio
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 in a couple of years.
On the other hand
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, I assert that the innumerable merits of using the
internet
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 and Television encourage the users to ignore the
radio
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. First and foremost, these sources present the news and
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 about a particular event
along with
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 the visual display, which is more attractive and interesting
in contrast
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 to the
radio
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. To illustrate, watching live sports on TV is more intriguing as compared to just
to listening
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listening to
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 the commentary on the
radio
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.
Apart from
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this
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, if a person cannot access TV to watch a live match, the
internet
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 may be accessed to listen
the
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 commentary and check live scores, thereby making the
radio
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 of no use in the coming future.
In addition
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, the
internet
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also
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 provides an option for two-way communication in which the user can check the facts and
information
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according to
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his
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their
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 requirement by searching any website. To cite an example, the
internet
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 site Google is a hub of huge
information
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 and
provide
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provides
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 access to any kind of resources through their search bar.
This
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 facility is clearly not available on the
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radio
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radio,
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 where one can only listen to broadcast channels
,
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;
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thus
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, the
internet
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 is much more convenient and beneficial for the user.
To conclude
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,
although
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 the previous generation prefers
radio
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 for the news,
still
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apply
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I opine that
radio
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 will be replaced by the
internet
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 and TV because it
also
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 streams video
along with
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 voice
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as
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, as
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 well as provides instant
information
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 at any time.

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structure
State your view in the first line and then give two or three big ideas to back it up.
development
Add more proof. Use two to three real facts or examples and show how they prove your view.
grammar
Check the grammar. Use short and clear sentences. Break long lines into small bits.
task response
Finish with a short end that restates your view and sums the main points.
style
Use simple word choice. Keep sentences short and easy to read.
content
Be careful with ideas. Do not use too much not in the task.
content
The writer gives a clear view and keeps to the idea.
structure
There is a clear plan with intro, body and end.
evidence
Examples are used to back a point.
coherence
Link words help the flow of ideas.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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