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To solve the ever increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is the increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?

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Increasing the cost of petrol is considered to be the most prominent method to mitigate the environmental-related problem all over the globe. While
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 method is proved beneficial to some extend, I would argue that some other options have the most effective way to decrease elemental hazards. On the one hand, the
price
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 of
fuel
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 can brings some solutions in
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 with, authorities who
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 increase the
fuel
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price
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 in order to decline the number of car on the roads.
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, the exhaust of
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 emissions will decline, and the impact on the environment will be solved.
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, the number of vehicles would not be decreased because some people have an ample amount of budget to live lavishly and they do not even think about the cost of the
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.
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, there are several alternative ways that
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 should be applied to solve
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 hurdle. The
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 one is that
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 the
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 should allocate the funds in order to improve the public transport as well as infrastructure. Owing to
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 More people will not only commute by trains, buses and subways but the number of
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 and their emissions will
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 be reduced.
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, the authority can impose strict legislation in terms of a tax on buying
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 or bikes.
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 is because people must be thought before purchasing a new vehicle due to the excessive
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 of vehicles and
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 will out of budget for them.
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, in India, the
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 is increasing the taxes on vehicles;
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, the purchase of new
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 are fall and
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 improve the atmospheric air. These are two methods governments should adopt in order to reduce global warming and its effects. In conclusion,
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 the
price
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 of
fuel
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 is beneficial in the short term to solve the environmental problems, it seems to me that some effective ways
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 should be implemented to tackle
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 problem.

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