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Some people think that there will be a decrease in international travel in future. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some folk make a prediction that in the near future, the public will visit different countries less. I believe that
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 is a positive trend because it will promote organisations to grow within the Nation, and be a stress-free movement. The foremost reason is that many small vendors will get the opportunity to expand their business.
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 is to say that most of the travellers make purchases
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 visiting different cities and places, if they buy it from a local vendor,
as a result
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 country's GDP increases and the standard of living of its citizens will go up as well.
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, it is observed that foreign multinational companies in Dubai source Indian products at a cheap rate from start-up firms and sell them at a higher cost.
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, most of the tourist nations generate more income not the goods provider.
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, regional travel does not require more preparation compared to a global tour because if a person wants to go abroad,
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 to contact an immigration agent, pay the government's fee, and pass multiple interviews before visiting countries, which itself is considered negative. Not only that, they have to go through so much paperwork,
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 as passport applications, medical examinations, biometrics, and booking air tickets.
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, a family from Ontario, Canada, wants to travel to the province of Manitoba does not require any approval because there is no border.
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 , there will be more advantages of travelling between the states, as it encourages community people to rise , and with less documentation, tourists can travel happily.

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task response
Add a clear intro that states your view. Then give 2 or 3 strong points to support it. End with a short conclusion.
organization
Use a topic sentence for each paragraph. Keep to one main idea per paragraph.
grammar
Check grammar. Fix run-on sentences and missing words. Use proper articles and punctuation.
content
Improve the use of examples. Make sure they fit and are easy to read. Do not state facts that are not true.
vocabulary
Choose simple words; keep to common daily words; avoid hard word choices.
coherence
Link ideas with transitions (moreover, for instance, in other words) to show flow between sentences and ideas.
content
The writer shows a clear view that less travel can be good.
coherence
Link words like Moreover and For instance help flow.
example
Some examples are used to back up points.
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