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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society: To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, we live in a network-social
society
, which means social networking
sites
 have played a paramount role in our daily life. While some public contend that it has a huge disadvantage in
both
 individuals and
society
, I assume that it has more advantages for
both
 our interactions and
society
. In contemporary
society
, more and more
people
 could benefit from Internet platforms,
such
 as Instagram and Facebook, Twitter etc.Comparing with the past decades,
people
 who used work in physical companies may change their work area that could be employee´s home，there is no need for them to work in a physical company anymore due to the benefits of a massive number of social platforms which are incredibly convenient for workers. It's obvious that
people
 not only save commute time but
also
 transportation fee ，
therefore
， social networking
sites
 has more positive influence than a negative one.
On the other hand
, the
second
 significant function of the social networking
sites
 which contribute to connecting with the public is
also
 helping the public gain more opportunities through mastering more attention from the Internet.
For example
, employers could find the candidates who are seeking employment as soon as possible by publishing the requirements and searching the keywords,
that is
 not only benefit employees but
also
 employers.
Besides
, it helps governments to solve the issues of collective employment which could make a better social environment.
Although
, maybe social networking spot have some disadvantages for those who are addicted to surfing the internet, the reason why they are obsessed with social networking
sites
 is that those
people
 lack self-discipline.
However
, comparing the weaknesses and the advantage of social networking
sites
, it still has much more profits for
both
 individuals and
society
. In summary, I disagree that social networking
sites
 have had a huge negative impact on
both
 individuals and
society
, and I assume that it brings more benefits to our humanity and our
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
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  • mental health
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