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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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THERE ARE A PLETHORA OF REASONS WHY INDIVIDUALS DECIDED TO GO FOR A
COLLEGE
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 OR UNIVERSITIES.
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, OBTAIN HIGHER LEVELS OF
KNOWNLEDGE
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KNOWLEDGE
 AND GAIN EXPERIENCE IN COOPERATIONS JOBS AND STARTING TO BE PREPARED FOR THE REAL WORD OF TRADES. STUDY IN A
COLLEGE
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 OR UNIVERSITY IS A PRIVILEGE FOR THOSE WHO HAVE THE OPPORTUNITY. IN MY COUNTRY,
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, MAJORITY SOCIETY IS NOT ABLE TO ENTER IN A
COLLEGE
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 BECAUSE TEENAGERS HAVE NO CONDITION TO GRADUATED IN HIGH SCHOOL, WHICH IS A CRITERIA TO INGRESS IN A SUPERIOR INSTITUTION. IT IS REQUIRED TO THOSE JOUVENALS TO START
WORK
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 BEFORE FINISHING THEIR STUDIES AND,
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, THE GAVE UP ON CONTINUING STUDYING.
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 THE NECESSITY OF GAIN MONEY, PEOPLE ARE NOT INSTRUCTED ON THE IMPORTANCE OF ATTEND COLLEGES OR UNIVERSITIES AND HOW IT COULD POSITIVELY IMPACT ON THEIR LIVES,
SPECIALLY
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 IN THE FINANCIAL AREA. I USED TO KNOWN PEOPLE THAT NEED TO DECIDE WHETHER STUDY OR
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CONSEQUENTLY
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, DUE TO THE REALITY OF MY COUNTRY, THE PERSON HAVE DECIDED TO
WORK
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 AND HIS LIFE COULD BE BETTER IF HE HAD DECIDED DIFFERENTLY. THOSE INSTITUTIONS OF EDUCATIONS ARE A FIELD FULL OF UNIQUE PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCES,
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 AS
VOLUNTAIRE
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VOLUNTARY
 JOBS AND COOPERATION OCCUPATIONS DURING THE STUDIES. AND THESE CHANGES ARE OF PIVOTAL IMPORTANCE FOR A STUDENT INCREASE HIS OR HER RESUME.
BESIDES
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, IN CONSEQUENCES OF THESE JOBS THROUGH THE
UNIVERSITES
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UNIVERSITIES
UNIVERSITY
, IS IT AN ENORMOUS OPPORTUNITY FOR CONSOLIDATE NETWORKING.
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THIS
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 BEHAVIOR IS
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 NOTED AT COLLEGES AND UNIVERSITIES. IN CONCLUSION, I CONSIDER THAT FOLKS WHO DECIDED TO START STUDY IN A
COLLEGE
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 OR UNIVERSITY WANT TO RECEIVE AN INCREASE UNIQUE
KNOWNLEDGES
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KNOWLEDGES
.
MOREOVER
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, THEY WISH TO BE PREPARED TO
WORK
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 IN THE REAL WORLD AND MAKE A CAREER. IN A NUTSHELL, THESE EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTIONS ARE THE
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 PLACE FOR THEM ACHIEVE THESES AIMS.
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