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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phones apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development has more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In recent
time
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, Most
people
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 are using their cellphone to pay their expenses.It has more advantages compared to
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disadvantages.It saves
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 and cost of transportation.I will elaborate more in a
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 paragraph.
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,By using
phone
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people
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 can pay their expenses from anywhere.it saves
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 along with convenience. In today's era,
people
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 have a hectic schedule so they do not have
time
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 to go directly to pay their bills.
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, a person wants to pay his water bill .
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 due to
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 like
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Paypal he could pay a bill by his
phone
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 on
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.
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, it helps them to prevent from a long line and
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 easy to
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 because if you are travelling somewhere but you forget to pay your bill.From anywhere in the world you could pay for
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.In the current situation like ,covid-19 everybody is using
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application
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 for paying their bills.
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,It
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 helps save money on transportation .Because if you do not
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 a
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then
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 you have to go in person to that particular place to pay for your expense.To exemplify, In the
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past
people
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 went in-person to pay their
phone
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 bills due to not that much
application
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 was invented .So they have to pay extra for the expense of petrol and
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 face traffic congestion.
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,
people
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 do not like to go outside in very bad weather conditions
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 as snow and rain.By using the
application
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 it helps them stay at home .On other hand, One adverse effect of the
use
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 of
phone
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application
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 is online fraud.Fraud could happen while using an online transaction on the
phone
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application
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. To sum up, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages. So
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application
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 help to save your
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 and it
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 saves the expense of the car .It was
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 very easy to
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 and convenient in any weather conditions.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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