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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

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Some people believe that scientific subjects are not appreciated by learners. There are several reasons contributing to
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 problem,
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 potentially drastic long-term effects on society. Nowadays a small number of peers are most likely to embrace a humanistic approach in their studies.
According to
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 a recent survey conducted by “The Guardian” in 2024, nearly 79% of British students tend to avoid
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 in their path
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 its level of complexity.
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, children need to deal with exercises that require a high level of calculation that most of the time are not able to resolve. Another decisive factor
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 regard resides in the lack of job opportunities. Learners are not eager to continue their studies or focus on something considered to be hardly useless as today a significant number of hr do not require scientific knowledge. The choice of not studying
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 in educational institutes will have long-term effects. Giving priority to humanistic subjects
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 as literature or languages implies a decrease in the deficit of one’s intelligence quotient. As an example, If students are not involved in learning natural phenomena or solutions to problems, they would face laziness in daily situations.
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, the lack of education of certain thematics in the field of
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 may bring
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an important illiteracy of one’s cultural background.
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, as it has been shown in the
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 episode of the programme “What do you know” conducted by BBC, one of the players failed to be awarded as he was not aware that the earth rises in the east and sets in the west. In conclusion, the option of not including
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 in one’s study path, ranging from its level of complexity and lack of job opportunities, has certainly contributed to harmful consequences on society in terms of brain neuron impoverishment and incompetence of people regarding knowledge.

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task achievement
Provide clearer examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning specific scientific fields that are affected could enhance your argument.
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Try to connect your ideas more smoothly using linking words. This will improve the flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Consider expanding your conclusion by summarizing the main points briefly before making your final statement. This will reinforce your argument.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly outlines the problem and presents the main points to be discussed.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in understanding your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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