The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These two charts present the comparison in the makeup of
tourists
to Australia and Germany between 1960 and 2010. In Australia, the percentage of European
tourists
shrunk during the 50-year period, from 53% in 1960 to only
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10% in 2010. The contributions of American and British
tourists
also
declined but to a lesser extent - 12% to 7% and 25% to 20% respectively.
On the other hand
, the makeup of Asian
tourists
in Australia increased dramatically - from only a tenth in 1960 to over half in 2010. As for Germany, the contributions of American and European
tourists
remain relatively unchanged - 25% to 29% and 45% to 40% respectively.
However
, the makeup of British and Asian
tourists
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to have flipped over the period - in 1960, Britain made up
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20% - twice that of Asian countries -
while
50 years later Asia contributed a quarter - about four times as Britain.
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