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Some people think technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 consider that
technology
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 has made
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's
life
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 difficult so it is better
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not to use it. I strongly disagree with
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 statement because it has made
life
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 easy and united
people
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 which helps to ease the
life
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 of
people
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.
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,
technology
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 has made
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 easy by reducing physical efforts at difficult jobs. Labours had to carry heavy loads at construction work. Automated machines that carry
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 had made
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 work easy.
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, housewives used to wash clothes with their hands but now they can easily wash these in washing-machines.
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 automated machines load heavy products earlier men used to perform
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,
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 has made difficult jobs easy and made the
life
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 of
people
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 easy because they do not need to
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 difficult work with huge physical efforts.
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,
technology
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 has connected
people
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 through social media. Now they can share thoughts and ideas with their closed ones. They can stay in touch with relatives and friends.
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 all is feasible due to
technology
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.
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 has become a medium to exchange thoughts. Humans need to be social to feel relax and better. Social media platform helps them to stay interacted.
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recent research stated that social websites help
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 to fight against the sense of loneliness.
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,
people
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 can share their thoughts and feel better which make their
life
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 less complicated. In conclusion,
technology
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 has made
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easy
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 not complex. I disagree with
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 statement that
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 should not be used because
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 made difficult jobs easy and connected
people
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 globally.

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