Some people believe that celebrity personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as whole. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Celebrations are an indispensable part of human life.
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many people think that it is a complete wastage of money, others say that family functions are vital fo every person and community.
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essay will discuss the benefits of both sides and share my perspective
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the end. Admittedly, a party requires a lot of money even if done for less number of folks.
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hard-earned money can be saved for future well-being as a retirement fund.
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, it helps in reducing the burden on offsprings and to live free from worries as the elderly needs medication and they
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suffer from illness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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