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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel it is a positive trend but others don’t. Give your opinion

#tourism #feel #trend #don’t
It is implicit that nowadays international industry more popular all over the globe. A certain segment of society believes that
this
 is a positive aspect of the trend
however
, others opine that there are numerous negative consequences
also
. Both arguments need proper scrutiny before forming an opinion. According to the
first
 school of thought, International travel Is very Important for any country's economic growths.
Firstly
, it creates more job opportunities for local residents and
consequently
, it enhances the income and funds them.
Secondly
, It broadens the horizons as any country can introduce their custom, tradition and culture all over the world and
this
 would be positive propaganda for the host country. To prove my point, according to an article in the magazine Indicates that tourists from Overseas visiting those
countries
 which are rich in culture and mostly they all are developing
countries
.
On the other hand
, the negative Impacts of travelling to the
countries
 should not be neglected. Due to the popularity, the Government has to make More Constructions
such
 as roads, hotel & restaurants. So
this
 is the biggest reason In Spoiling the natural habitat which threatens the life of animals.
Besides
, tourists produce a large amount of litter
That is
 not recycled and it threatens nature life. In conclusion,
although
 Global relationship brings a range of benefits for
countries
, it would enhance the average level of life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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