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demand for food is increasing worldwide. whats the cause of this? what measures can the international community take to meet these demands?

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It is true that
food
 consumption is becoming more and more in the world. It is important to understand
this
 change before any organization taking any actions on
this
 issue. The
first
 possible factor is the change
of
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 lifestyles. Today, technologies are advancing at the fastest pace and it imposes a significant effect on the way
people
 live their lives. Mobile internet is one of these great outputs that make our daily life more meaningful as it not only provides more job opportunities with high paid salary but only it makes us more convenient to spend money.
For example
,
people
 can use their mobile phone and find their prefered meals in a mobile app like DianPing
,
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 and pay the bill through WeChat payment,
then
 the order will be sent to the home in less than half an hour which is impossible a few years ago.
Such
 easy operations definitely lead to the rising consumption of
food
 as it provides an efficient way for
people
 to make online orders. Another reason would be the blooming of the economy in the world. As the economy advances,
people
 have more money to spend,
food
 is one of
people
's basic living requirement. With more money being available,
people
 would like to take the opportunity to try all kinds of delicious
food
.
Furthermore
, having dinner together with the family or friends is quite popular,
as a result
, advancement in the economy directly leads to the increasing of
food
. It is a great chance for the international community to update its service and management.
For example
, the community can introduce an advertiser to raise awareness of some international foods while getting some compensation fee.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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