Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people say that
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rising the number of
sports
facilities can improve public
health
.
In contrast
, others believe that other steps would be needed for better
health
. I
also
agree that
besides
, the
sports
facilities,
healthy
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diet plays an important role
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healthy
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life. Generally, physical activities have a vital role to maintain our life
healthy
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and disease-free.
Therefore
, individuals focus on several games like football, Cricket, run, etc.
Sports
or any kinds of physical exercise keep
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human’s
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the human’s
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mind and body as well.
For example
, a person who participates
regular
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cricket match has less chance to face obesity
that is
the main causes of diabetics, heart problem and other issues. For
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purposes, society
want
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to facilitate various playing areas for all ages, especially
young
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. I
also
think the number of play-ground should be increased for the improvement of the physical conditions.
Similarly
, there is no doubt that diet
also
help
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to balance the body’s fitness. Foods take a crucial function to improve public
health
.
For instance
, taking
the
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fresh fruits and vegetables maintain
person’s
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blood pressure and blood sugar level.
However
, people can improve their physiological conditions by avoiding some unhealthy foods which contain extra calories and cholesterols
such
as
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, processed foods, etc.
That is
why sometimes the doctor
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advises
advices
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their patients to take low
cholesterol containing
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meals. So, I believe that healthy diets and
sports
both have an unavoidable objective for maintaining a life healthy. In conclusion,
although
, some people believe that
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increasing
a
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number of play-ground is
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best way to develop public
health
,
but
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without a healthy diet may not be possible to achieve
a
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good
health
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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