Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make work calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on the individual and society?

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we have seen a considerable rise in the advancement of technology. Some people argue that

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are responsible to make people’s

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but some

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do not find

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easier than before. It

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the identity of

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his privacy and business-related software.

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, we could get in touch with all the family members, relatives and friends and by just clicking the buttons we get connected with everybody.

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could access all the sate information and businesses related calls and messages with cellphones.

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, nowadays,

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our world in many several ways too, apart from calling, it has enough technology to track down our health and call emergency services just in case if we lose our health suddenly.

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, a friend of mine admitted to the hospital

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week, as he got

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attack while jogging and no one near to help him, so Siri called 911

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sometimes. Apart from their positive effects, it has

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negative effect on teenagers, as

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, they are busy in their own world of

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, resulting

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of ethical and moral values in their

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, they are getting away from

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society,

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goal and having some medical issues even in their young age of using cell

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. In conclusion, Cell

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are making our

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better than previous in terms of technology advancement but bringing some sort of health issues and lack of fraternity among individual and children.

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