Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make work calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on the individual and society?

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we have seen a considerable rise in the advancement of technology. Some people argue that

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has positive effect outweigh the negative

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his privacy and business-related software.

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, we could get in touch with all the family members, relatives and friends and by just clicking the buttons we get connected with everybody.

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could access all the sate information and businesses related calls and messages with cellphones.

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, nowadays,

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our world in many several ways too, apart from calling, it has enough technology to track down our health and call emergency services just in case if we lose our health suddenly.

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attack while jogging and no one near to help him, so Siri called 911

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negative effect on teenagers, as

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of ethical and moral values in their

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goal and having some medical issues even in their young age of using cell

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better than previous in terms of technology advancement but bringing some sort of health issues and lack of fraternity among individual and children.

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Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make work calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on the individual and society?

Fully explain your ideas

More and more women are now going out to work and some women are now the major salary earner in the family. What are the causes of this, and what effect is this having on families and society?

Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say that there is too much harmful content on the internet. They say the only way to make the internet safe is for the government to censor the content of websites. To what extent do you think the government should control what information is available on the internet?

To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it's important to do so? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?