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In cities, spaces for housing should be created by knocking down historic buildings. What is your opinion?

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In today's world, it is believed by some part of a population that historic
buildings
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 should be knocked down to free the place for new housing. In my opinion,
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 is a devastating tendency and
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 will discuss the possible arguments to support my idea.
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 with, these
buildings
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 keep the history inside of them and it is important for the descendants which will
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live
 in the future.
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 is because of the fact
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that
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 the past of your country but
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 historical places are full of the atmosphere of that time and it may be
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interesting
 for the majority of
people
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 to feel it.
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, there are no modern
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which
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 can replace the ancient architecture and
people
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 should value their roots and their past which is kept in historic
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, in the UK it is prohibited by law to knock down
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 in the
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 of London since
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 value their history.
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, there is a lot of free ground on the Earth which can be used for building, including the suburbs.
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 is due to the fact that not only they can construct
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 outside the city and prolonge its frontiers but
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 they can use historical
buildings
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 like a foundation for
houses
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 and make repairs inside, leaving the facade intact.
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, both the community and construction firms will benefit from
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 of decisions and no one will have to knock down historical
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, in
Ukraine
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 the major part of
Kiev
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Kyiv
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 consists of ancient historical
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 where ordinary
people
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 live. Eventually, to conclude, I am firmly convinced that spaces for housing should not be created by knocking down historic
buildings
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.
Firstly
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,
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 is because they keep the history of the country inside of them and,
secondly
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 since there are other options that can be beneficial for all
people
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