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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's world, more and more people consider that in the nearest future convenience foods will become viral and will replace traditional methods of nutrition. I agree with
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 with, on the one hand, the majority prefers semi-finished products since it saves a huge amount of time.
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 is because of the fact that not only do humans have
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 they do not have enough time for cooking and it is more
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convenient
 for them to buy an additional portion of salad in Tesco.
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, since the speed of life is increasing every
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 in a couple of years workers will not have time for food preparation and will eat only already prepared
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, recent research has shown that in the UK more than 30% of citizens feed their families with convenience food and do not have cooking skills at all.
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, the majority of modern humans consider cooking to be boring and they like the variety of
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 they can order from delivery. The main reason for
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 is that people got used to
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 efforts and energy into housing work and devote their whole existence to work.
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, not only does the majority of women hate to prepare nutrition but
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 they enjoy changing
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 every day ordering from different restaurants or purchasing them in supermarkets.
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, one study has illustrated that about 40% of housewives answered that they think that cooking is the most
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unpleasant
 thing that they have to do. Eventually, to conclude, I agree with the opinion that convenience food will replace traditional
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 in the nearest future. Two major causes of
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 that,
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,
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 method is not time-consuming and,
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, since humans can avoid monotonous and boring work.
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