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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society on individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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 it is sometimes thought that
children
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 ought to afforded to opted daily stuff,
this
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 method brings
children
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 to only think about their own wishes.
However
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 other
people
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 believe that they supposed to make a
selection
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 on essential matters. On the one hand, a number of
people
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 believe that
children
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 should be allowed to select typical matters
for instance
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 food, clothes and entertainment and I agree. In other word,
children
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 have to be tough gradually by their
parents
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 in making a
decision
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 about everyday stuff.
This
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 to train their brain and educate them about thinking skill which really required by them in daily
life
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.
As a result
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, the
children
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 can make a
decision
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 for their daily matter without asking someone for help or taking a longer duration to execute the
selection
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. Another point to consider is that teaching
children
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 to be matured in their
selection
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 of daily
life
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 requires a process.
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instance
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 many mistakes will be made by them and during
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 period
parents
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 supposed to play their vital roles in guidance and advice their
children
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 about the consequence of their
selection
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.
Besides
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 that, in the process to teach
children
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 to be more accurate in making their
decision
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 it is important to note that for all
parents
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 to always remind their
children
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 that we
also
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 need to tolerate
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 and not to become selfish.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 trusted that
children
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 have to afford an opportunity to make a
decision
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 that affects their lives. By doing
this
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 approach
children
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 are expected to be more matured in making a
selection
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. By doing
this
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,
children
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 will have their own goal and had a specific target for their
life
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.
For example
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,
parents
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 can ask their
children
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 what they want to do after finish a school session and provide several options for them to opt.
This
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 approach directly prevents them to get involved in unnecessary activities
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 as playing games. It is important to highlight that, society and country will
also
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 obtain the benefit if
parents
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 tough their
children
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 to make a
decision
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 that can affect their
life
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 in future. In conclusion, while many
people
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 vary in their opinion, I think is better for all
parents
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 to teach their
children
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 to make a simple
decision
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first
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 before expose them to make a tough
decision
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.
Children
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 require time to be matured in making
decision
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 and
parents
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 should be a mentor for them as reference.
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