In some areas of the US, a “curfew” is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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an active social life at the present days, especially in their leisure time.

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, focused on their safety, some local governments in the United States claim that it would be beneficial if they just go out with an adult at night. I tend to agree with

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because, from my point of view, they are not conscious enough about their acts.

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, it is undoubtedly true that American families strive to keep their children protected through curfews considering that some cities face significant rates of crime nowadays.

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, it is widely known that offences are likely to occur at night as there is a reduced number of policies working in

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period. To illustrate, statistics demonstrate that the majority of assaults happens about midnight

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when the youth would be vulnerable.

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a strong human argument for doing so. Teenagers are highly influenced since they do not have developed their thoughts and values yet.

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why, despite a plethora of advice, they tend to rely on their friends rather than on their parents. Take

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as an example. Individuals usually have the

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contact with illegal substances when they are at parties with their colleagues until late.

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, curfews can help families as a whole. It is crystal clear that adults are liable for their kids in several aspects,

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they might have a harsh punishment.

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, fathers prefer to accompany their children everywhere in order to avoid severe concerns. If young people drink and drive,

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, parents would be responsible for not supervising them, which is common at night. To sum up, when it comes to

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up a child, rules should be adopted in order to prevent major problems. As far as I am concerned, adults can deal better with

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moments, and

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, they should take care of their teenagers until late.

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