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Online shopping is replacing offline or shopping from stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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With the advancement and ease of
internet
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, there is a drastic change in the buying behaviour of the customers. It has been observed that electronic shopping is becoming a prefered mode over
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 mode of shopping.
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positive
 aspects regarding
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 scenario. Talking about the negatives, with the increase in e-commerce, the traditional businesses are getting disrupted and in some cases even resulted in
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 of many business units. Not only does
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 affect the small traders selling their
products
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 locally, but the economies of various nations
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. Though
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online business
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 developed immensely in recent years, still there are
people
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 who don't understand the technical aspects of
internet
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 which results in frauds committed against them.
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, hackers have misused the electronic data of
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 vulnerable community and looted their money.
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,
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internet shopping has not only affected the trader and economy but created issues for the less
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technologically
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people
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also
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. Moving towards the
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positives
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 its inception, online trade has been a time saver for the
people
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. It ensures that
people
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 can get their desired
products
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 and services using their computers and mobile phones without any risks of carrying, counting, and managing cash.
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, online sellers are able to save a lot of money by eliminating overheads expenditure;
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, the buyers get the
products
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 at a much cheaper price as compared to the market price. For examples, electronics are always offered at discounted prices on e-commerce websites. So, it can be said that, with online trade,
people
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 get
products
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hasslefree
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hassle-free
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 and
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 at cheaper prices. In conclusion, though with the growth of e-businesses, there are issues being faced by the traditional businesses and added to some trouble of learning the way transactions take place online, the positive changes are
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 getting
products
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 easily and at lower prices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • landscape of retail
  • digital purchasing platforms
  • enhanced accessibility
  • mobility issues
  • competitive prices
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • vibrant local economies
  • packaging waste
  • carbon footprint
  • social cohesion
  • community engagement
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