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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and what is wrong, so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects.

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Whether lecturers are responsible to teach
students
 how to determine wrong and
right
 to be a good member of society or they only teach theoretical information in their class is a matter of debate. I will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, wrong and
right
 are changeable between people due to their religion and tradition.
That is
, religions and traditions have a lot of rules on good and bad behaviour. Primarily, many
students
 can have a different religion;
therefore
, particular issues might be a conflict with others faith. Had
this
 responsibility put
teachers
’ shoulders on, they would not have achieved
this
. Equally importantly, traditions have a key role in the wrong and
right
. Many nations have different traditional behave, which shapes their life.
Thus
, lecturers are more unlikely to be active on all traditional aspects.
On the other hand
, there is an array of reasons for those who support the
teachers
 should teach good and bad behaviour. Put simply, not only should
teachers
 be responsible for their branches, but
also
 they must teach the difference between wrong and
right
. The prime reason is that
teachers
 are role model for
students
 and they have an assignment to prepare the
students
 for real life. Another reason is that
teachers
 could teach fundamental rules of the community to reintegrate
students
 into society. Take some countries in which morality is a lesson, the
students
 are ready to be a good member of society. In conclusion,
although
 those having some argument to support the subject which the
teachers
 shouldn’t be responsible on the morality, I do believe that they teach
students
 to be a good person.
Submitted by Ahmet Münir KOCAMAN on

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