In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

During the
last
few years, the number of small merchants'
shops
is plumbed due to the decrease in the affluence of customers, that prefer going shopping in
huge
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the huge
a huge

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shopping centre and do the grocery shopping in large
supermakets
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supermarkets

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,
instead
of purchase from local farmers.
My
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opinion
this
is definitely not a positive trend, because penalise small business that
are
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vital for the economic well-being of a small town or a city.
First
of all, the increase of big shopping centre, and the subsequent closure of local
shops
, affects the economic well-being of an incredible number of families that survive exclusively thanks to the earnings derived from the income of their activity.
For example
,
in particular
in tourism cities, there a lot of people that run
an
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and

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own shop of souvenir, handmade clothes and jewels or typical food.
Furthermore
, the increase in the number of purchase from mall, encourage,
for example
, the consumption of fast fashion clothes and shoes and discourage a
sustainble
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sustainable

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shopping. Indeed,
shopping
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the shopping
a shopping

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centre is full of
shops
belonging to big retailers and commercial brands.
As a result
, folks avoid
to purchase
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purchasing

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items made by hand and in small quantities,
prefering
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preferring

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to buy clothes
af
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as

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well known
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brands. In conclusion, I strongly believe
that is
extremely important to preserve local
shops
in order to safeguard the well-being of their owners and to
substain
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sustain

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the
econimic
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economics

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of small towns. At
last
but not least, it is necessary to reverse
this
trend to encourage a more
sustainble
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sustainable

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way of doing shopping and to increase
sells
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sales

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of handmade items and local products.
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