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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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With the global advancement in technology and transport, there has been widespread community connect resulting in a large number of tourists visiting cultural heritage properties and
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 attraction of various countries. In
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foreign
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 than the locals. One school of thought is, to charge higher than the normal rates when, global passengers are visiting cultural and
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 spots across the country, because it helps locals to earn their bred better more efficiently.
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, it adds up the foreign revenue to the government’s treasury, which,
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, contributes to developing cultural infrastructure. As per the report published by the Ministry of social welfare and culture preservation, it was stated that
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 earnings from the locations where higher rates were applicable for external tourists, had seen a growth of 35% year on year.
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 it is essential to have inflated rates for global tourists. Having said that,
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, some people contradict the opinion and think that, same charges should be applicable to all without discriminating the fact that from where they are coming from. Because it will attract more
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 footfall at
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 locations resulting in the spread of values and culture at the global level. It will
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 create a feeling of goodwill in the hearts of foreign visitors. Study shows that places where
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 had to spend the same amount of money as like locals, there has been an exponential increase in the number of visitors visiting
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 places, In nutshell, applying inflated charges to foreign
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, help in generating a good amount of foreign exchange boosting the local economy,
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, one should not forget that, uplifting the local culture globally is equally important by not discriminating the charges for global visitors
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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