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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

Serious issues have been caused in urban areas due to the excess population.
Traffic
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congestion
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 and
Water
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 scarcity are the two major concerns. Strict policies and rules by the individuals and governments will help to handle these troubles.
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,
Traffic
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congestion
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 is caused by many personal cars on the road. Many
people
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 can afford to buy cars due to the availability of low -cost loans.
Traffic
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congestion
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 can be avoided using carpooling as one of the solutions for commuting to work.
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, in my company, posters are put up in the canteen, in the lift and in the common areas too to bring awareness and benefits about car-pooling.
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,
people
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 must make use of more public transport
such
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 as metros and buses. Government should provide facilities as bus passes at affordable rates for all classes of
people
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. Another issue is the
water
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 scarcity
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 caused due to the excess usage of
water
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.
People
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 should make use of
water
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 wisely.
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, reuse the used
water
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 for watering the plants, cleaning the driveways. Governments can implement more irrigation projects to bring
water
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 from other areas where there is an excess amount of
water
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 to the cities.
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, another solution for the government is to make rainwater harvesting mandatory. To illustrate, in Bengaluru and in some other cities, residential apartments adopted already rainwater harvesting. In conclusion, governments and individuals should work together by taking necessary measures to address the
Traffic
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congestion
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 and
Water
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 scarcity problems in the cities to make the lives of inhabitants better.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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