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Marketing and promotion is a key to successful business To what extent do you agree?

#promotion #business
Most
of
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corporations
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the corporations
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 considering
main
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the main
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factors
 of their success are
markting
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marketing
 strategies and promotions. I partially agree with
this
 statement because there are many other
factors
should
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that should
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 consider as well and in
this
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brifly
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briefly
disscuss
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discuss
 of those too.
To begin
 with, any business
need
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 a plan to increase sales of their
products
, so companies are following marketing tactics and promotional tools to get customers attention.
Furthermore
, to hold loyal customers and attract
the
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potential buyers, firms have to update and pass the information about new
products
, new development of current
products
 and availability of
products
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in conveniently
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inconveniently
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.
For example
, BMW company is conducting mass media promoting
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campaign
 and
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organizing
verious
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various
exibitions
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exhibitions
 to show their new sports cars.
On the other hand
, several other
factors
 should not ignore by the companies because those
are directly affect
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to
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their growth.
firstly
, nowadays people concern about
quality
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the quality
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 of
products
 which
their
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 are using so if the
production
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product
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 has
poor
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the poor
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 condition, no matter how much money spent for
markting
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marketing
 and promotion, it will not affect any positive impact to people's mind.
For instance
, many electric cars are promoted in recent years but most of them failed.
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Additionally
,
after sales
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 services are more
essessial
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essential
 in these days and customers are expecting it more
then
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than
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 ever. to sum up, business firms are spending a lot of
dollers
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dollars
 for marketing and promote their product because they believe those are the crucial elements to grow sales of production.
however
, with some
advantages
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compaines
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companies
 should consider the other
factors
 as well.
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