Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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are equal rights to survive on the earth.It is believed that some individuals think that
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amount and time should be provided to save
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wild pets and birds.I completely agree with
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given statement and the reasons for my opinion will be elucidated in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant illustrations. To commence with,
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attention to save
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wild
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because it is part of our ecosystem.The
first
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and foremost reason is that wild
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plays a crucial role to maintain the balance of
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on earth.
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, bats
are mostly eat
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the
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insects and protect
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's crop from vanish.So that they earn money from the wheat and rice in every
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.Apart from
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about the
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lives they could not survive on the earth and
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ecosytem
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would not live stable.It
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the environment
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will kill
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and birds. To add more, it
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the
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lives.
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to it, if individuals cut the forest and kill the
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they could not find the food and it could be harmed for the
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will vanish the forest
then
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wild
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such
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as tiger, lion and many more will come on the road and
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's houses and trying to harm the
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will peril and they will not survive on the planet. To conclude, owing to the reasons
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as balance the ecosystem and protect the
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efforts on to save the
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