some people claim that museums and art galleries are not need today because everyone can see historical objects or artworks by computer do you agree or disagree with statement

Museums
and
art
galleries
play a vital role in representing each
country
past.
However
, there are some individuals who say that
museums
and
art
exhibitions have some specifications. They will use the
technology
to look at the information about historical objects. in
this
,
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essay I will discuss whether devices or designed
art
work stations are better options. On the one side, it is undeniable that
technology
brings hi-tech devices,
such
as Mobile phone , computer, tablets etc. These electronic gadgets help individuals learn and study about any
country
and
also
, these electronic devices are easy to access for everyone .
similarly
, The markets are full-on at
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low cost. Especially, cell phones . Everyone has a smartphone and its features great help to those
people
who would not like to visit many
museums
and
art
centresMoreover, it has no time limit they can use anywhere at any time so , they encourage themselves to take advantages of the
technology
.
On the other hand
,
Although
it has several benefits for a different kind of work all over the world , there are some major drawbacks for new generations that are the reasons I m fully disagree with the above statement to use the
technology
instead
of built
museums
and artwork centres.
First
and the most thing is coming generations never know about nations culture and traditions until they will not see visually , read and feel about their past. As a
result
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when
people
visit any
museums
or
art
galleries
they will inspire by them and
also
will encourage their friends to see and study their history.
secondly
,
its
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a source of
people
income and as well as for
country
revenue since
this
art
museum and
galleries
interact
people
or tourism to visit their
country
.
that is
the place only where a person can see historical objects.
for example
,Ajmer fort is the best example. In conclusion, It's true that
technology
makes
people
life easy to get information about any
country
traditions and culture.
However
, in my point of view, designed new
art
galleries
and
museums
centres help youngsters to gain knowledge and encourage them.
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