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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a “fat tax” is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Living a healthy life has become an important subject of discussion in most cultures around the world. Some believe that government should take part in the responsibility for a healthier society, and
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 from buying it by increasing its taxation, while others disagree.
This
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 essay aims to discuss both points of view and defend why taxing could help
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 to create, and maintain better habits. Tax is usually seen as an unfair intervention from the government, and for some
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, when it comes to
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,
people
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's judgement should be respected. So that, nobody should pay more to eat anything, especially because for many, unhealth
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 are the only affordable meal.
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, they claim that adults are able to make better decisions for themselves, and because of that, taxing unhealthy
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,
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 as soft drinks or sweets is not necessary. Another school of thought is that taxing
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that is
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 healthless, could leave room for incentive better alimentation habits, especially for children. If a child can buy a fresh sandwich
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 of a hamburger, because the
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 one cost far less than the
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, he will build taste to make healthier choices later in life.
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, the extra money from the tax could help to decrease the prices of healthy
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, making it the natural choice for everyone, including the poorest. To conclude, tax "fast
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" could be the way for a healthier society since the money from it is used to encourage
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 to make better choices.
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, in cultures where health is important, the government should interfere to help possibilities reach everyone.
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