Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents. Some others believe that less controlling will help children deal with adults’ life. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
children
are expected to follow their
parents
’ desires and do what they are asked to.
However
, opponents of
this
idea argue that being more independent during childhood could help them cope with difficulties in their later life. While there are some benefits of being guided by
parents
on many occasions, I personally believe that
children
can develop better if their
parents
are their supporters, not controllers.
Firstly
, every child needs to have
caring
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family for many purposes because they need to be supported
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both financially and physically. Even though having strict
parents
could help some people to be more organized, disciplined and
as a
result
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be more successful in their professional, there are a lot of cases that it had negative consequences. These
children
are always in a hurry and afraid of their actions’ results because they always have to take into account their
parents
’ criticism. To illustrate,
children
with strict and controlling
parents
tend to spend less time outside with their peers which results in
lack
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of trust and self-confidence. So, all these traumas
children
receive because of their
parents
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behaviors
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towards them affect their decisions adversely in their
adults
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adult's
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life.
However
, there are some successful ways of bringing
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adults. One of them is to be more friendly towards the
children
as a parent. It is clear that
children
have a lot of things to learn from their
parents
as they grow up, in
this
way
parents
should be their supporters
instead
of drawing boundaries for their own
children
.
Moreover
, as every generation’s way of thinking differs,
parents
should consider their
children
’s mental state too.
For example
, travelling a lot and participating in dozens of
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were uncommon during some current
parents
’ childhood,
however
, nowadays Gen Z
children
love to do these activities. By
this
, I concur that
children
could be more confident and experienced which can help them be more successful later. To sum up, even though
parents
guide
children
through our development period, they shouldn’t judge their
children
’s choices, but support them which is
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effective way of upbringing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering
  • pivotal
  • instilling
  • discipline
  • fosters
  • stability
  • opposing
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • real-life situations
  • strict parental oversight
  • make decisions
  • autonomy
  • challenges
  • resilience
  • self-reliance
  • stifle
  • personal growth
  • creativity
  • middle ground
  • individuality
  • guidelines
  • authority
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