Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents. Some others believe that less controlling will help children deal with adults’ life. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
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are expected to follow their
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’ desires and do what they are asked to.
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, opponents of
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idea argue that being more independent during childhood could help them cope with difficulties in their later life. While there are some benefits of being guided by
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on many occasions, I personally believe that
children
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can develop better if their
parents
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are their supporters, not controllers.
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, every child needs to have
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family for many purposes because they need to be supported
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both financially and physically. Even though having strict
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could help some people to be more organized, disciplined and
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be more successful in their professional, there are a lot of cases that it had negative consequences. These
children
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are always in a hurry and afraid of their actions’ results because they always have to take into account their
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’ criticism. To illustrate,
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with strict and controlling
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tend to spend less time outside with their peers which results in
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of trust and self-confidence. So, all these traumas
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receive because of their
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parents
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parent's
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behaviors
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towards them affect their decisions adversely in their
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life.
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, there are some successful ways of bringing
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adults. One of them is to be more friendly towards the
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as a parent. It is clear that
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have a lot of things to learn from their
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as they grow up, in
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way
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should be their supporters
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of drawing boundaries for their own
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.
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, as every generation’s way of thinking differs,
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should consider their
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’s mental state too.
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, travelling a lot and participating in dozens of
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were uncommon during some current
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’ childhood,
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, nowadays Gen Z
children
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love to do these activities. By
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, I concur that
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could be more confident and experienced which can help them be more successful later. To sum up, even though
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guide
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through our development period, they shouldn’t judge their
children
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’s choices, but support them which is
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effective way of upbringing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering
  • pivotal
  • instilling
  • discipline
  • fosters
  • stability
  • opposing
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • real-life situations
  • strict parental oversight
  • make decisions
  • autonomy
  • challenges
  • resilience
  • self-reliance
  • stifle
  • personal growth
  • creativity
  • middle ground
  • individuality
  • guidelines
  • authority
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