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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

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Dear sir, I am a regular visitor who eats lunch at the college cafeteria purely on grounds that the
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 in it is hygienic and fresh, suitable priced and it has a friendly atmosphere. There are,
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, a number of deficiencies that I believe should be put right.
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 your staffs try to keep the tables clean, there are not enough employees at peak time to clear their tables themselves
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 they finished eating.
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, certain
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 do not bother to do
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, there are numerous
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 who do not wait in the queue to be served, which is very annoying for the majority of us.
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 but not least, there is only one billing counter and
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 makes it extremely busy. As mention earlier, from my perspective, it would be a good idea providing that more signs were put around the cafeteria asking
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 to put their plates and cutlery on the trolleys provided and throw away their leftovers and rubbish.
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, you should tell
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 when they are being anti-social and jumping the queue.
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, you should consider adding more billing
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 so that we are not late for our classes.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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