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People in many countries do not wear their traditional costume. Some argue that they would forget their history and tradition. Do you agree or disagree?

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To agree or disagree with the
statement
 that
people
 are forgetting their history and
tradition
 is an important issue. Putting the discussion in a wider context, not wearing a traditional costume will set aside the value of their culture has always been debatable. Even though some
people
 think that
people
 will forget their
tradition
 if they don't wear their respective costume ,but I strongly disagree with that
statement
.
First
 I will discuss some arguments supporting my disagreement, after which some aspects against that will be presented. I wholeheartedly believe that one should not judge by their outfit that how well they are following their
tradition
. It's not always true that if someone is not wearing their traditional or historical clothes
then
 they are not following their
tradition
.
For instance
, Dr A.P.J Kalam was a Muslim guy but never seen in their traditional outfit but still had a strong belief in his religion.
On the other hand
, many
people
 agree with
this
statement
 for many reasons. The most important is that
following
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 religion on regular basis helps to build a hard religious thought process
although
 it's not always a better way of thinking. One more reason
people
 agree with
this
statement
 is, traditional outfit helps to recognize someone's culture or
tradition
 in between a group of
people
 coming from different geographical location. In conclusion, while many
people
 vary their view about the topic, to my way of thinking following history and
tradition
 is must
nevertheless
 it is not necessary to show off the same by wearing a representative costume.
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