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there is more and more violence in movies and on tv, therefore it is necessary for the government to control the amount of it to decrease the violent crime in the society. do you agree or disagree

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Technology is involved in every field
such
 as
movies
. Features like VFX give an advantage to the director to direct some unexpected scene in the film as seen in the
movies
 in past few years.
People
 love to watch
action
movies
. Few
people
 are involved in the crimes by watching
action
 and violent movie. The government should take some steps to restrict some limit on it so that they control
violence
 in the real-
life
. I agree with the provided statement.
First
 of all, some big celebrities are act in
action
movies
.
People
 all over the world are
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huge fan of Hollywood actors. Especially, the youngster loves to watch them in the theatre. They want to live a
life
 like them and they copy every style of
action
 heroes.
However
, teenagers are involved in some crimes and
violence
 as they have seen on tv.
For example
, youngster starts smoking and drinking at an early age by watching on tv. Later, they involved in
any
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illegal activities like buying and selling drugs that create
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big problem in their
life
. All
this
 good in the
movies
 but in
real
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,
life
 it would destroy
life
.
Moreover
,
movies
 like the dark knight and money heist.
People
 are inspired by these
movies
. To illustrate my point, when the dark knight release a person get an idea of killing
people
 from the famous portrait joker and kill a number of
people
 in the theatre.
Next
, many
people
 copy the plan of robbery and murder from the
movies
 and did the same as in the film. They successfully did it and never get caught. All
this
 happen by the
violence
 in the
movies
. In conclusion, the government should take some serious
action
 against the
violence
 on the tv. The censor board have to put strict
guidance
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 in the
movies
 that should help a lot to prevent the crimes in the
movies
 as well as in
the
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society.
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