Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
modern era,
people
would like to celebrate all functions related to entertainment-based.
However
, a fair amount of
people
have
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disregard
the definition of the conservative or holy carnivals when amid festival time due to today
people
only desire to like themselves
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compared
to the past celebrations with meaningful. I strongly agree with
this
point and I will be mentioning my points in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are many reasons for nowadays
people
have forgotten the interpretation behind the carnivals
such
as traditional or religious.
Firstly
, today generation folks are wanted to enjoy
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themselves and they are would not like to unite to celebrate.
For example
, a few
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man
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is being celebrated their most important day which New year how they are not gone to the
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church
on
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proper
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time when night prayer while they are being participated
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year party.
Moreover
, the most
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youngsters
are would not like to the festivities in the olden
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style because they need to get happiness from these kinds of festivities.
This
trend
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increased dramatically
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to the human have been forgotten to the original value of these kinds of
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.
Furthermore
, the government
also
provide a long holiday for
this
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they can take
a
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fun.
For instance
, in India government is given three days leave for the
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pageant while top actors movies will release
hence
the citizens
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movies
instead
of
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celebration. To conclude, irrefutably technology is the main victim of
this
trend expand because the citizens are satisfied with these kinds of gadgets in form of
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more entertainment. I think in the future days the folks never celebrate to
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orthodox
or faithful festival undoubtedly because of they will need more expectation and love from anything.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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