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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different opinions about genetic engineering nowadays. While some of them consider that it has negative impacts on health, personally I believe, genetic engineering will protect many lives.
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think in a way that against
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 of genetic engineering.
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scientific proof to defend
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genes decreases the nutritional value of daily foods.
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, GMO fruits,
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, some are sure that manipulation of genes can cause specific
diseases
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 by altering the gene structure, they may have skin cancer in the long term.
Last
 but not least, genetic modification is known to cause natural imbalances.
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genetic engineering is a contribution of science to humanity. One of the advantages is the changes generally make crops more sustainable to insects and
diseases
 because they change the regulation of adverse effects.
For instance
, today, products are healthier and larger in terms of production.
In addition
, some inherited
diseases
 will no longer be present in the human body due to the manipulation of DNA.
Moreover
, scientists are using
this
 technological advancement to develop treatments for various deadly
diseases
. In my opinion, genetic engineering is a gift of science for us. In conclusion,
although
 genetic engineering has some cons, I support the view that includes
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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