Some people think it is no longer necessary for children to go to school because they can do all their learning online. Others believe learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The usage of technology in
education
has come a long way causing virtual education
possible for everyone including children
in almost everywhere around the world. This
has caused some people to think about why they should send their kids
to school
. However
, there are still some people who believe attending school
is paramount. This
essay will explore and consider both views as well as why I think kids
should attend school
to build their social skills and prevent depression and isolation.
According to the first
group, online learning is more relax and less stressful for kids
. It is clear that when kids
do not have to get to school
, they can sleep more, have their breakfast at home and start their class in the comfort of their room. Also
, they do not need to wear formal cloth or uniform which make them be more relax. Besides
, parents
also
will be more comfortable not having to drag their children
out of bed and be worried about traffic around school
or being late for work. Hence
, virtual learning put parents
and kids
in less amount of day-to-day stress.
Others, ,,
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apply
however
opine that youngsters have to attend Add the comma(s)
,however
school
to have supervised education
. If kids
are left on their own with their devices, who can guarantee they will log in to their classroom. There are so many other fun activities that can distract kids
online and prevent them from being in their virtual classroom. For instance
, famous platforms like Instagram, Facebook, Tick Toc, Youtube can be more entertaining and distracting for a child who has no supervised online education
. Also
, some younger kids
can not be left alone at home if their parents
are at work. Thus
, it is not practical for young children
and distracting for others without having someone to control attendance.
In my view, children
should physically be present in school
to build their social skills by interacting with each other and adults. This
is a paramount skill that can be learnt only by being among others. When kids
are staying home all day in front of the screen they can not socialize and enjoy each other presence. Besides
, not having physical contact is one of the most important causes of depression and isolation which can be prevented by having in-person contact at school
.
To sum up, there are two opposing views regarding kids
education
. Some think that parents
should stop sending their children
to school
because it's easy and comfortable for both parents
and kids
. I am with other group believing children
need to have supervised in-person education
in order to guarantee the quality of learning and to build social skills in order to have a healthy mind.Submitted by armiario139 on
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