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Water scarcity is a serious problem in many countries. What are the causes of this？And what solutions can be done by individuals and the government?

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Nowadays, it is not surprising that the issue of
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scarcity
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 has attracted many heated debates due to its impact on the whole society.
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 topic
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 and suggest some possible important solution to overcome
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 painful
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 which can be done by individuals and the government. There is no doubt that there are multiple causes of
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scarcity
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, but let's start with the major
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 which is global warming. Due to warmer ,climate the issue of dry or drought land is not something new to us, as a
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result there are many difficulties come across to store
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 for a long time in
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 areas.
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, it leads to
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scarcity
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 in highly warm places and the best example to illustrate
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 is the very well known place of India called the
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Kachchi
 district. Here, people usually get a
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 supply just once a week which is very less for big families. There are many solutions to tackle
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problem
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 but the best
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 which individuals can do to save
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 is the
water
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 harvesting
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. While building new houses
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 can
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 develop a rainwater collection
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 to store raindrops and use it as and when required for household stuff. Government can
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 encourage their people to develop a harvesting
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 by giving them subsidies for the same. The development of infrastructures like
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 lakes or reservoirs is
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 of the main things
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system
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 can focus on related to the
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scarcity
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problem
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.
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, good governance can
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 play a vital role in saving or storing
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 for their people. In conclusion, the
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 of
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scarcity
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 could be sensibly and easily tackled if the above measures are taken into consideration and shared by both the concerned authorities and the general public.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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