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Some think scientists should be allowed to send messages into space to communicate with other life forms while others believe this is too dangerous. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#think #scientists #messages #space #life #forms
Generally, a lot of
people
 believe that
other
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another
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life
 form
exsists
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exists
 in
space
.
However
,
people
 are facing a dilemma about should scientists send
masseges
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messages
 into
space
 to find and communicate with aliens.
However
, some
people
 think that it is
to
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too
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 dangerous to send
this
 type of
masseges
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messages
massages
massage
.Others think that it is a good opportunity to find
life
 forms in
space
 and we should definitely do
this
.
Therefore
, in
this
essay
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 I will discuss both sides and give a relevant opinion. On the one hand, since we have lived on
this
 planet we always try to prove that we are not alone in
space
 and scientists send signals to
universe
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the universe
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 to find something. I reckon that facing
with
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apply
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aliens might lead to improvement of our planet and create new advanced
medecine
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medicine
 technologies
such
 as
cure
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a cure
the cure
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 for cancer.
For example
, we could find new minerals or new ways to collect them which may
safe
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save
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 our earth.
Moreover
, the whole new world will be open to us and there will be more opportunities for
life
.
On the other hand
, meeting with
other
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another life form
other life forms
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life
 form can lead to extinction and wreak
to
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havoc.There
are
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is
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 a lot of different
scenarious
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scenarios
 of
this
.
For instance
, aliens may not be friendly and they might
decied
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decide
decided
 to destroy our planet and all humanity.
In addition
, the fact that we are not alone in
universe
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the universe
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 will affect a lot of
people
 and it might be hard to live without fear of war. In conclusion, I assume that
eventually
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 we will find the other form of
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live-in
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live
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life
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 in
cosmos
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the cosmos
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 and scientists should not stop
send
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sending
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 messages, but no one can predict the consequences of
this
.
In addition
, we should improve our
life
 and earth at
first
 and not search for other
life
 or help.
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