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People are encouraged to get rid of things in order to get the news of fashion and the latest technology. Do The disadvantages of a throwaway society outweigh The economic advantages?

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It is irrefutable that
consumerism
 is promoted in many nations of the world.
This
 essay intends to analyse the positive and negative effects of
this
 use-and-throw culture. I personally believe that the disadvantages outstrip the advantages. On the positive side,
consumerism
 leads to mass production, which is something good for the employment sector. Mass manufacturing definitely leads to mass employment.
This
 is undoubtedly beneficial for the overall economy of the country.
Furthermore
, because of
consumerism
, people get choices. When there is demand, more and more manufacturers come into the market.
For instance
, about two decades ago, there was only Kissan tomato ketchup in the market but today we have Heinz, Del Monte, Cremica, Maggi and so many more varieties of tomato ketchup in the market. On the downside,
consumerism
 promotes a use-and-throw culture, which is very bad for the environment. There is a lot of rubbish generated because of excessive
consumerism
. Unnecessary packaging is
also
 done to make these goods appealing to the eye. Often,
this
 rubbish is not decomposed and ends up in rivers and waterways.
This
 is definitely harmful to the environment.
Secondly
,
consumerism
 makes people work more and more to afford these products.
This
 workaholism makes them forget to draw a line between work and leisure and
also
 between work and family. The desires never end and ,
consequently
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 over-working becomes a part of life.
This
 leads to stress and strain in life. Another negative point is that when children or youngsters are lured by these things and their parents cannot afford them,
then
 they resort to petty crime
such
 as pick-pocketing and chain snatching, which is certainly not good for any society. To sum up,
consumerism
 has both merits and demerits, but the cons are definitely more than the pros
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