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Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part-time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it's effect on a child.

#children #parents #job #time #effect #child
To whom it may concern, Cindy Ng has been an employee here at TFI for the past year. She is an eager, enthusiastic person. She is always willing to help out her teammates, and shows excellent technical knowledge and ability. She fully understands the program design concepts and she is willing to ask for help where she needed it. Cindy never let the team down with regards to design and documentation. Her communication and people skills are excellent, and always a pleasure to work with. I would recommend Cindy as an excellent candidate to work in a team of software engineering professionals. Should you require
further
 information, please feel free to contact me. Sincerely yours, CT Poon

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work experience
  • time management
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • financial skills
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • balancing work and school
  • stress and burnout
  • academic performance
  • extracurricular activities
  • hobbies
  • socializing
  • overall development
  • well-being
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