Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some countries, young people are enrolled in some fund programs as they may be called to assist older people,
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with animals, and do some donation task. In
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essay, I will outline what I consider to be the potential advantages of
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a program, as well as some of the negative outcomes that I feel are likely to occur. To commence with, there are some benefits of community charity programs for teenagers.
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,
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action would help them in their personal development. Because if they invest their time and potential to do these activities,
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as caring aged people, helps animals, it can lead them to the sense of responsibility towards their society and makes them more mature.
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get
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experience that would help them in their future if they will
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in community services. In India,
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, many employers consider their unpaid
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in animal shelters if they apply for any job. There are,
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, some possible drawbacks of
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charity scheme. The
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one is that the teens may resent being forced to participate. To be precise more, if they choose to take part, they will find it more fulfilling and rewarding. When it is mandatory though, the program may not have intended effects. The
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issue is the stress and anxiety that may be induced when teens are put in uncomfortable situations without adequate training and experience. To exemplify, having the experience with sick and dead animals would have a
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impact on them emotionally. In conclusion,
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contributing to community service would be worthwhile, making
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kind of job mandatory may be counterproductive. For maximum benefits, I feel that it would be better if teens would be volunteered, rather than being forced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory part
  • high school programs
  • sense of duty
  • social responsibility
  • essential life skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • work experience
  • employable
  • community improvement
  • local community
  • time management
  • empathy
  • compassionate attitude
  • diversion from academics
  • critics argue
  • varying quality
  • inconsistency
  • students’ experiences
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