More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and other are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Due to human acts towards nature, a myriad of wild animal species have

disappeard

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and others are on the verge of extinction. In

this

essay, I will outline the main reasons why

this

phenomenon is taking place and probable solutions which must be implemented to settle

this

issue.

Firstly

, since

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revolution,

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the population

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around the world has multiplied widely. Because of that fact, animal

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and

food

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industria

has

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increased their activities.

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, animal

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resources

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such

as red meat, chicken, honey, propolis, are causing ecological disturbances, since farm species production for food purposes requires enormous pieces of earth. To illustrate

this

, a notable justification

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the great cattle breeders in Brazil who are responsible for burns and

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of the Amazonia rainforest, with the excuse that the area will be used for progress and to improve the market in the state.

Secondly

, as a matter of fact, rubbish production

also

has risen, leading to water pollution and

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of several aquatic beings. The documentary film Seaspiracy,

for example

, portrayed clearly the impacts of plastic

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marine life and how the fishing market is going to collapse the marine

ecossystem

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by the middle of

this

century.

Nonetheless

, there are

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of measures that can be taken in order to mitigate the impacts resulting from carnivorism,

such

as becoming vegan. Starting veganism, as least of

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matter, is boycotting the production chain and,

therefore

, not collaborating with

environment

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collapsing.

Although

, it will not end with the meat

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, starting somewhere with someone might help, even if it is minimum. To sum up, the reason why non-human species are on the endangered list

are

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the carnivorous habits that the majority have.

Thus

, starting a plant-based diet would improve

this

status.

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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country's police or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. discuss both views and give your opinion

Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?