More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and other are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Due to human acts towards nature, a myriad of wild animal species have
disappeard
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and others are on the verge of extinction. In
this
essay, I will outline the main reasons why
this
phenomenon is taking place and probable solutions which must be implemented to settle
this
issue.
Firstly
, since
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revolution,
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around the world has multiplied widely. Because of that fact, animal
resourses
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and
food
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industria
has
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increased their activities.
For instance
, animal
resourses
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resources
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,
such
as red meat, chicken, honey, propolis, are causing ecological disturbances, since farm species production for food purposes requires enormous pieces of earth. To illustrate
this
, a notable justification
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the great cattle breeders in Brazil who are responsible for burns and
dewooding
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of the Amazonia rainforest, with the excuse that the area will be used for progress and to improve the market in the state.
Secondly
, as a matter of fact, rubbish production
also
has risen, leading to water pollution and
death
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of several aquatic beings. The documentary film Seaspiracy,
for example
, portrayed clearly the impacts of plastic
in
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marine life and how the fishing market is going to collapse the marine
ecossystem
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ecosystem
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by the middle of
this
century.
Nonetheless
, there are
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of measures that can be taken in order to mitigate the impacts resulting from carnivorism,
such
as becoming vegan. Starting veganism, as least of
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matter, is boycotting the production chain and,
therefore
, not collaborating with
environment
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collapsing.
Although
, it will not end with the meat
bussiness
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, starting somewhere with someone might help, even if it is minimum. To sum up, the reason why non-human species are on the endangered list
are
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the carnivorous habits that the majority have.
Thus
, starting a plant-based diet would improve
this
status.
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