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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that fast
food
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 consumption is becoming very popular in so many countries causing lots of health concerns for
people
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. I strongly agree with the idea of the
government
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 implementing a high
tax
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 rule on fast
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 products in order to reduce its consumption. Nowadays, street
food
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 is omnipresent almost everywhere around the world. The reason lies in the fact that they are cheap to make and
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 it is affordable for the majority of
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.
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, they are high in calories and low in nutrients, causing so many health conditions like obesity, diabetes and cardiac diseases.
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, according to the" Nutrition" magazine, eighty per cent of
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 suffering from obesity reported having at least 3 days of fast
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 per week.
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, fast
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 is not a wise choice of
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. In order to tackle health problems caused by fast
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 consumption, the
government
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 should increase
tax
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 on those foods to make them unaffordable for
people
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. If the price of
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 unhealthy
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 source goes up,
people
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 will less likely to buy them. The prime example is that Switzerland has no McDonald stores because the
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 put a 20 per cent higher
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 on their foods and eventually all stores got bankrupt and had to close all their branches across the country. As can be seen, demanding a higher than the usual
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 on fast
food
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 can reduce the sell rate and eventually deterring
people
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 from buying them. In my ,perspective the
government
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 should demand a higher than the usual
tax
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 on fast
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 make them less affordable. By doing that ,
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people
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 will think twice before buying them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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