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The widespread use of the internet has brought many problems . What do you think are the main problems connected with using the web ?what solutions you can suggest?

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internet
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 technology has increased drastically over the past few years. It gives us
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 amount of information no doubt
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that.
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, in
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 of
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the
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 large amount of
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 has caused many difficulties.
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drawbcaks
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drawbacks
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internet
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 technology and suitable solutions along with
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a conclusion
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. To commence with, the major downside is, most of the
people
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 spend ample amount of
time
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 on the
internet
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 without any considerable reasons. Nowadays social
meadia
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media
 is one of the popular things to do in the list of young
people
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.
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people
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 just seat
ans
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and
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instagram
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Instagram
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,
twitter
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,Facebook which leads to
lack
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 of physical activity.
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, one is spending leisure
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 on the
internet
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hence
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 there is no
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 to do creative
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,physical
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 or other important tasks. Another disadvantage is ,there is a lack of privacy and security. In
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modern
 era ,
people
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 can search
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 anyone and can do antisocial
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, online payment and online transactions are increasing
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rapidly
.
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,
people
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 are facing more online fraud cases than ever
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before.
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, according to the survey of Times of India, it shows that
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 of cheating through the
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 has increased 45% of
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 in the
last
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 30 years.
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 number shows that how unsafe to
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 the
internet
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 for money transfer. Some control measures should be taken to control
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 problem.
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, everyone should monitor their screen
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computer
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 , mobile etc and try to reduce the
use
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internet
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 for useless
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, one should only
use
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 safe methods for banking
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 as well as
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 with the authorities. To sum up, it can be concluded that the
internet
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 is
a
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benificial
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beneficial
 but it should be used wisely and
securily
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security
securely
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread use
  • main problems
  • associated with
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • privacy
  • data security
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • online scams
  • fraud
  • loss of productivity
  • impersonal communication
  • social isolation
  • digital divide
  • solutions
  • suggest
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